Entangled in your sheets again!
A groan? A moan? Tickling my ear?
Needing to get up but when
I try to move you snuggle near
A groan, a moan tickling my ear
Your arms wrap around me
I try to move, you snuggle near
Your intent awakens suddenly
Your arms wrap around me
The alarm calls my name
Your intent awakens. Suddenly,
I’m late! Who am I to blame?
The alarm calls my name
Needing to get up, but when
I’m late, who am I to blame
Entangled in your sheets again?
Another Pantoum for Gina at dVerse! This time coupled with Patrick’s Pic and a Word Challenge #176 – Entangled. I think this Pantoum more closely follows the form.
It was quite fun, actually, to think of sentences of phrases that could be changed with punctuation, but definitely a challenge to put it together and have it make sense. I also played around with WP to see how to stop it from messing with the spacing of the lines when I publish the posts. I am really quite mindful of things like that but had given up with WP since I am not the savviest with technology.
* Feedback on this Pantoum is welcome and much appreciated! Thank you in advance for your comments! *
Lastly, dedicating this one to my Honey BK (Before Kids).
©️ iido 2019
i love the playfulness and subtle sensuality, the best kind of alarm to wake up to. perfect rhyming and the rhythm just right Irma. the suddenly was placed most succinctly! and teh sneaky change in punctuation worked like a charm!
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Thank you, Gina! This form is really quite fun in that regards.
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i am enjoying reading and seeing the different ways it is tackled, really a lot of fun!
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A gorgeously happy and loving poem, a very enjoyable read 📖😊
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Thank you much, Ivor! Life was so different before the rugrats….
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Haha, the joys of life 😄
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nice one!
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Thanks! 😁
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welcome 🙂
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A lovely way to wake up. I smiled at the dedication to BK (before kids).
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Oh it was! Alas, gone are the days…thank you for stopping by!
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I like that alarm calling one’s name. And those tangled sheets making one late.
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Thank you, Frank! My alarm has an especially annoying voice in the morning….😁
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Oh Irma, that can turn into quite an entanglement… 🙂
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You know it, Rob!! 😉😉
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Ahh, I just posted my first pantoum for Patrick’s challenge as well! 🙂 This form goes so well with “entangle” as the theme. Well done for playing with punctuation. I’ve left that for the next time.
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Yes! The interweaving lines definitely make for lovely entanglements!
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I like the whimsical nature of your poem. I wish I knew more about WP formatting 😦
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Thank you! It was fun to play with the punctuation. At least WP doesn’t mess that up!
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🙂 You are welcome and yes.
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That was a fun read, weaving in and out of changing time and perspectives. Love the use of punctuation to alter meaning and flow. Lovely!
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Thank you, Patrick! This is a fun form but it is a challenge.
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An intricate weave to get it just right, for sure. =)
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I like the way you play with the punctuation. A playful pantoum in all respects! (K)
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Thank you! I’m glad that playfulness came through!
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This I love!! ❤️ Tangled sheets…mmm!
Honey BK…. 😂😂
Your poems about husband, kids, family life always strike a chord.💞
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It’s that season of life, isn’t it? My husband ask “is this poem about me or about the kids who come still come into our bed in the middle of the night?” 😂😂😳
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OMG Irma! Till a few years back my kids would come into our bed too, much to the exasperation of my husband!! 😂😂 All a part of life! 🙄😜
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Unfortunately, yes! As long as they stop the habit before they are teenagers right? 😂
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Mine have. So there’s hope for you! 😂
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