Rapid vapid
Too fast for nothing
Falsie selfie
Not true for/that’s me
Connected dejected
Screen time cutting life
Me-first cloud-burst
Rain on your parade
Hot mess distress
Help get out of the Arctic
Stop this selfish
#choosekindness
This prompt responds to Patrick’s Pic and. Word Challenge #169 – Rapid. Patrick’s poem and photo inspired this quick little piece that started in my head with the rhyme “rapid vapid” and developed into some phrases and thoughts about the current state of society. To me, this poem sounds frenzied and choppy (although with a definite beat) – similar to how I feel about our country (the USA) right now. Even the writing (and posting) of this piece was frenzied and chopped (I had to quickly post to meet the deadline without my usual comments included). However, it all turned out ok. I’m hoping it’s that way in real life as well.
©️ iido 2019
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you nailed the frenzied and choppy … I like it!
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Lol! Thank you! Frenzied and choppy is easy for me – calm and smooth is much harder! 😂😂
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lol slowly slowly 🙂
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Everything is chaotic these days. Nice poem and beautiful images. I especially like the heart carved in the tree.
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Thank you very much! The heart was on a tree at the local botanical gardens near me. Being there was a good respite from our current dilemma.
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I read from the news that its a little chaotic out there lately…and this little cute poem.of yours just break that monotony..its whimsical ….the photos are beautiful too
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Thank you, Mich! Good to hear from you! You’ve been missed….
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Choppy and chaotic on surface but it has a beautiful internal rhythm and I love the alternate internal rhyming lines!
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Thank you for this feedback! I had the first line and couldn’t let it go so the rest of the poem had to follow suit.
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You are so welcome! The first line really pulled me in. 😊
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this is amazing slam poetry! read this when ever the opportunity arises, its power packed, succinct and well paced!
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Thank you so much!! I have always been fascinated with slam poetry but haven’t thought of writing such…well, until you pointed it out here. I may try some more…your words give me courage!!
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i think you have the right rhythm in you for it, i don’t, i could feel it in your voice, certainly give it a go, not many can carry this form so well
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Agreed. Slam poetry is so musical and so much more of a performance. Will have to give it some thought….
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you have just that right the animated voice for it my dear
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Love this! I’m a sucker for the falsie selfie reversal 🙂
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😍💐
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