A Quintilla
To the moon and back, I promised
No matter if I’m demolished
My child, I will search high and low
I’ll follow wherever you go
No fear – for you, I can do this
A Quintain
I promised to the moon and back
My love brings me to this journey
I won’t come back ’til what I lack
Returns with me in a hurry
Dear child, there’s no need to worry
Hélène provides another beautiful picture prompt for “What do you see? Weekly Challenge”. The image reminded me of the children’s book, “Guess How Much I Love You” which had the phrase “to the moon and back” and these poems were birthed!
I also tried to incorporate the writing challenge from Grace at D’Verse Poets to try writing an English Quintain or a Spanish Quintilla (too late to add it to Mr. Linky). These two forms are similar – poems with five (5) lines each – however the Quintilla keeps an eight (8) syllable count per line while the Quintain has no such constraints. Also, the Quintain follows the rhyming form ABABB while the Quintilla can follow AABBA or ABBAA or ABAAB or ABABA.
I am not sure these are my best work as they sound quite limerick-ish and that wasn’t my intent, but I had to write something! At least I didn’t start it with “There once was a mom from South Philly…”
©️ iido 2018
Beautifully done. I love the message in your poem, ardent love of a mother for her child, as well as how you used the words “to the moon and back”. Splendid write. Thank you.
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Thank you!! 💐
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There’s something intriguing about the moon and such a wonderful and mystical element to write about. 🙂 Lovely poems!
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Thank you! Yes, the moon beauty and mystery is inspirational…
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You’re welcome! 🙂
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That is quite a journey to undertake. Specially like this line: My love brings me to this journey.
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Thank you! As a mom, I feel that fierce protectiveness more than ever. No journey is too difficult if it’s for my kids.
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both are poems of reassurance. there is a sense of urgency on your words. like time is running out but you promise to be steadfast for this person you are advising. well done on all prompts!
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Yes! I’m glad that came through! The rhythm helps with that I think.
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yes the iambic meter makes your words fall into a very lyrical prose, you did very well my dear.
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I love both for they exude a mother’s unconditional love so beautifully.
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Thank you dear friend! I’m glad it resonated with you! ❤️
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You are so welcome. It sure did. 💕
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Beautiful and heartfelt poems, the love we feel for our children is an unbreakable bond.
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So very true! Thank you for reading and commenting!
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